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Rate my new rap that i posted on mr. lifs website.?

My Lyrical cranium is combined with uranium to be my nuclear weapon/ It Murderes weak rappers by attacking there cerrebrum and desenegrates there rap state of mind like liposuction/ It will be painful not like a Euthanasia injection like a laser beaming at your rectum/ It will be so powerful you'll fell the vibration thru your feet and dogs will get heat/ The airplanes could not take off on there fleet they will have to leave 10 hours late and the restrooms will be flooded so they cant masturbate/ 5 bars into this rap I'm surprised that your still Reading and your spinal cord hasn't snapped/ And your bones haven't collapsed like the twin towers/ The smell is sour from all the people that died by Reading this i wish my death technique could freeze them/ Frostbitten in Antarctica in the snow but now the people there going to get a surprised like when the titanic go/ My flow RICOCHET off the sun sent high powered solar rays to Antarctica and sent the snow a BLAZE/ And if i keep spitting it ain't going to stop it ain't going to change/ And you should see me when i actually unleash my range/ That the batting cage becomes the batter and the batter becomes the batting cage/ And that the rain Gage burned that the fire falling from the sky/ That the high guys could out of there stage when they saw the meteorite falling from the sky/ And was about to hit them like a bank and bonnie and Clyde/ Now where about to take a little ride/ Now if your a parent please put your babies to rest/ Because in 24 hours we will all be deceased/ And there won't be no resurrection because i can't stop spitting/ Now go spend some times with your family or go do some reading/ So you can reverse my spell and everything can be well/ But thats going to take a miracle/ Like if a tiger joins pride rock/ Will you can at least try go!/ 1-10

Public Comments

1. I JUST READ THE FIRST FEW LINE. Lines is too long. You tried too hard.
2. This is some long sh*t yo. 5/10 but calm down with writing long lines.
3. So you kill people with your rapping? And the you spit on them? And we all die? And you rhyme miracle with go... so are we going to die from your bone cracking rap? the ice in antarctica? a meteor? this is all over the place. It doesn't follow a single idea... it's not coherent (or cohesive). I think you should try to write about something people can relate with rather than just how great you think you are.
4. shorten the crap out of those lines!!! try writing to a beat and maybe your lines will end up being shorter
5. sorry the lines and flow where wacked out even if some of the lyrical quality made up for it 4.7/10, getting better but shorten the lines